Yaaaay Chapter 12! I'm so glad you finished a version to your satisfaction :)
And to mine :D
At the opening - the Calormene's wooden framework over the throne room of Cair Paravel intrigues me. I wonder if they haven't discovered how to get into all the treasure rooms even yet. And how the hell they captured all the four's legendary equipages. where were they kept before the Calormenes came & how were they seized... your fic.. it makes me look at all the details because I just *know* you have an explanation thought out consciously or unconsciously for every little thing. You SO do, don't deny it.
Heh. the servants bow lower to Susan. Take that! I'm glad that none of Narnians really know about Susan's issues with her siblings, that she gets their respect too.
Oh! Prejun will be in SUCH BIG trouble if Bahadur finds out that he's tryng to rescue peter, not just preserve his jurisdiction!
What can he possibly want from her that he thinks he can get more easily with sweet words and good food than with torture and imprisonment? Nothing good Susan! Nothing good!
Every eighth man? iinteresting... not a Roman decimation. Calormene system of counting implications. Or just him wanting to kill more people.
If Bahadur's threat of diaspora was carried out then I would expect a Narnian Zionist movement. These hypothetical Narnians' longing for a never-forgotten homeland parallels with the Pevensies longing for their Narnia, ether like Susan at the beginning of the chapter or as they did while in England.
“Bitch!” Bahadur gasps in Calormene – that word hasn’t changed particularly much over the years. I just think it'd be so cool if Susan were ever to speak before a group of Calormenes in her Old Calormene. It'd be so impressive! Like speaking in King James English or something. 'twould be very demi-goddess of her.
“You’re the idiot that touched a queen of Narnia,” Susan says, and he hits her again.
This time she’s ready for the blow; she turns her head with it and snaps her foot up into HER groin. Typo? :P
OH, wait, the oceanid didn't take Peter his sword? huh, on first read-through I sorta assumed he had. Hurrah for further complications!
LOVE Cair Paravel presenting peter with the dead assassins. <3
“That was the time you got the clap from that tarkaan with the huge –”
“Susan,” he protests.
She doesn’t miss a beat. “– sword, and Lucy nearly spilled her cordial laughing when she had to dose you.” LOL. LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL.
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Date: 2009-03-30 12:30 am (UTC)And to mine :D
At the opening - the Calormene's wooden framework over the throne room of Cair Paravel intrigues me. I wonder if they haven't discovered how to get into all the treasure rooms even yet. And how the hell they captured all the four's legendary equipages. where were they kept before the Calormenes came & how were they seized... your fic.. it makes me look at all the details because I just *know* you have an explanation thought out consciously or unconsciously for every little thing. You SO do, don't deny it.
Heh. the servants bow lower to Susan. Take that! I'm glad that none of Narnians really know about Susan's issues with her siblings, that she gets their respect too.
Oh! Prejun will be in SUCH BIG trouble if Bahadur finds out that he's tryng to rescue peter, not just preserve his jurisdiction!
What can he possibly want from her that he thinks he can get more easily with sweet words and good food than with torture and imprisonment?
Nothing good Susan! Nothing good!
Every eighth man? iinteresting... not a Roman decimation. Calormene system of counting implications. Or just him wanting to kill more people.
If Bahadur's threat of diaspora was carried out then I would expect a Narnian Zionist movement. These hypothetical Narnians' longing for a never-forgotten homeland parallels with the Pevensies longing for their Narnia, ether like Susan at the beginning of the chapter or as they did while in England.
“Bitch!” Bahadur gasps in Calormene – that word hasn’t changed particularly much over the years.
I just think it'd be so cool if Susan were ever to speak before a group of Calormenes in her Old Calormene. It'd be so impressive! Like speaking in King James English or something. 'twould be very demi-goddess of her.
“You’re the idiot that touched a queen of Narnia,” Susan says, and he hits her again.
This time she’s ready for the blow; she turns her head with it and snaps her foot up into HER groin.
Typo? :P
OH, wait, the oceanid didn't take Peter his sword? huh, on first read-through I sorta assumed he had. Hurrah for further complications!
LOVE Cair Paravel presenting peter with the dead assassins. <3
“That was the time you got the clap from that tarkaan with the huge –”
“Susan,” he protests.
She doesn’t miss a beat. “– sword, and Lucy nearly spilled her cordial laughing when she had to dose you.”
LOL. LOLOLOLOLOLOLOL.