Terrific as always. Your world building is superlative, with the ship names and captains and their histories, even the swearing. I adore the griffins in battle, too, and how they are used as a sort of RAF in Narnia. I always enjoy Osumare as a point of view character too and the bit of backstory with his brother at the end is terrific.
Your attention to detail in the battle is superlative and makes for a very exciting and compelling read. And Peter, oh Peter, you are such a ... well... mean SOB but showing some adroit compassion at the end. A little. Maybe. I still want to see more of Fio, Osumare, and Peter together. So adorable. Really. She wipes Cat spittle off his crown!!!
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Date: 2011-06-11 05:29 am (UTC)Your attention to detail in the battle is superlative and makes for a very exciting and compelling read. And Peter, oh Peter, you are such a ... well... mean SOB but showing some adroit compassion at the end. A little. Maybe. I still want to see more of Fio, Osumare, and Peter together. So adorable. Really. She wipes Cat spittle off his crown!!!