FINALLY

[bedlamsbard]

Excellent, we have reached the point where the next 23K of Be Like Water can be Peta and Caspian gettin' it on.

Oh, and then I suppose there will be some plot stuff with the war and the siege and the duel and Cornelius and Miraz and Aslan not showing up. But, you know. Mostly the sex.

You know what's funny? Part one of Water is formatted like a movie (or at least it is to me; y'all may think differently once you see it): short and to the point, with lots of sex and action in the middle. Dust, on the other hand, is formatted like a novel (again: to me; y'all may think differently).

This is funny because in some ways they're essentially the same story, if you replace the Telmarines with the Calormenes. Except Dust is more complex. And has less sex.

There is a possibility I'm not thinking clearly right now.



Peta laughs. “Now that’s funny,” she says. “I suppose you weren’t expecting us to show up, then.”

“Not until Trufflehunter and Nikabrik began dragging me all over the western wood to meet creatures I’d never even heard of,” Caspian says. “After that, well – at least you were supposed to be human, by every legend I’d ever heard, Narnian or Telmarine.”

“Yes,” Peta says. “There is that, at least.” She sounds amused rather than offended, and puts her head back down on Caspian’s shoulder, reaching out with one hand to wrap her fingers around his. “Did I say thank you for what you did the night we attacked the Telmarine camp?”

“I think it was implied,” Caspian says.

“Thank you, then,” Peta says, and then lets go of his hand. Caspian doesn’t understand why until she curls her fingers in his hair and turns his face towards hers.

She kisses him for a long time, shifting until she’s straddling his lap, and Caspian hears himself make an inordinate sound of want as he drags his hands up Peta’s back, feeling the knobs of her spine beneath the fabric of her shirt. “Yes,” she whispers against his mouth. “Like that, do that –” and then lets go of him to pull her shirt off over her head, unbuckling her sword-belt and tossing it aside before settling back against him to kiss him again.

Caspian splays his hands out across her back, her skin warm and smooth beneath his palms, and Peta twists in his lap, making him gasp. “I always did think darkness was overrated,” she murmurs, reaching for the laces on his shirt. “I’d love to see your face right now.”

“May I –” Caspian begins, not even sure what he’s asking, and Peta says, “Yes, god, yes,” and drags his shirt up over his head.



ETA: Be Like Water is now officially longer than Dust, although Dust would be longer if I counted all the scenes I've cut (three different versions of chapter 3, one of chapter 4, one of chapter 5...really some days it gets ridiculous).

Also, Caspian and Peta? Just got themselves laid.

28,437 / 50,000 (56.9%)

And yes, I did just change all but two of my icons. Now we have Peta! A.k.a. Scarlett Johansson.

Comments

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

Oh, man, I hate that. Good luck!


Although I should rewrite the preceding scene, because it kind of sucks. *faces*

The next bit, though, is all porn. Well, okay, I admit that before that there's some Edmund.

Edmund steps back to give them room to climb out, grinning unashamedly at his sister as Peta hits him upside the head. “What took you so long?” she gripes. “Really, I think you could have come sooner.”

“Yeah, I was working on that,” Edmund says, then pulls Peta into a tight hug. “Sorry,” he whispers into her hair as Caspian stands awkwardly still, trying to ignore the knowing looks of the moles and dwarves standing around. “Came as fast as I could. Though,” he adds as she pulls away, “it did look like you might have been happy to wait a little longer –”

“Oh, shut up,” Peta says, and turns to the watching Narnians. “Thank you,” she says, and her smile is blinding. “As for you,” she adds, turning to Caspian and catching the front of his shirt in her fist. “You can come with me.”

He can’t hide his grin.

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

Edmund, or porn. Edmund, or porn. Oh, the decisions....

Grin grin grinning Caspian!

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

*beams* The next thousand words or so are porn. Peta and Caspian are very happy.

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

I think you mean a different h-word there...

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

Well, afterwards, I mean. You know.

Although. There is actually less sex than in the earliest snippets.

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

But it is probably better sex. Besides the early snippets were you writing me commentporn just because you could...

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

I'm not necessarily sure it's better sex, since I was writing it while looking at the snippets in one window. *grin*

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

But that means you improve on them, y/y? If you change stuff, it is for legit reason.

Also, plot. plot automatically makes for better sex.

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

Really, I feel the next 20K can be sex, and then perhaps the remaining 2K can be plot.

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

Do you see me complaining?

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

's not like there's much plot left anyway. It basically boils down to "under siege, Miraz mocks Peta and Caspian, Professor Cornelius shows up, duel, battle, happily ever after BUT WAIT THERE'S MORE, pregnancy, marriage, happily ever after."

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

*someone* is going to come along and complain that you're being heteronormative and staking Happily Ever After on pregnancy and marriage... arm yourself against this attack in advance ;)

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

I'm sorry, happily ever after until the kid goes missing, the kingdom gets conquered, the in-laws die and/or vanish, the husband throws the wife out of the country, the wife starts sleeping with herself from another world, only herself happens to be a HIM, they then have the most fucked up marriage ever, they save the world, have lots of sex, the him leaves, and the wife is left with her husband, her badly damaged country, and her still-missing son.

*beams*

[ineptshieldmaid.livejournal.com]

that's better. ;)

[bedlamsbard.livejournal.com]

Although part one does in fact end with marriage and pregnancy. Or possibly with an out-of-wedlock pregnancy and an engagement.

You know, after fiancee kills a bunch of people, including her prospective uncle-in-law.